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Friday, September 21, 2018

The Cave


Hello bloggers!
This is my story from writing this week, these past whew weeks we have been working on Imagery (five senses) and other descriptive phrases as you might know from my Ice palace blog post.
This is my Post Test story The Cave.
Please give me some feedback on what I could improve on next time on my descriptive phrases.
Enjoy


Wednesday, September 19, 2018

The Cave



Hello bloggers!
Today we did a long write for 55 minutes, this was my Draft about the Cave.
I think I did really well on my introduction because I added lot's of setting description.
To improve my story I need to add more to the conclusion and Resolution.

I would love to hear from you about what you think I should add to my story on my improvement session.

Enjoy!


Title: The Cave

Lush green forest filled the land, and happy little animals ran around in the grass. Squirrels clambered up the trees and the fruits on the bush's we're ripe red, ready to be picked. The smell of beautiful flowers drifting in the breeze. In the distance you can hear two pairs of shoes slap slap, one running, and one walking. You can also hear the birds chirping in the background tweet tweet.

“Hurry up!” June said as she ran full speed across the pathway, June groaned and started to keep the pace, she tripped and fell face forward onto the floor. “I told you you should be careful” Erika said trying to hold in her giggles. “We should take a break, we’ve been walking for hours” Erika said sitting down. “Um, maybe we shouldn’t” June pointed to a giant black cloud rising in the background. “Fine fine” Erika said hopping to her feet. The dark clouds we're already above them and the trees scowled at them slapping their branches. They found an opening to a cave and sat down dripping with water. “ARHHH!” June shouted as she tried again and again to light a fire “useless!” June said as she threw the stick to the cave floor. Suddenly a grunt rung in the cave, WHAT WAS THAT! Erika said through to Junes mind I don’t know suddenly a black shadow came running full speed out of the cave  and swallowed them whole, swallowing June and Erika's scream.

Roughly an hour after they have been taken away June was busy trying to get out. It was dark, and gloomy, and you could smell that this was old and rusted. The cold metal bars pushed June back forcing her to stay put. The sound of scuttling of rats and mice around the corners, and the BANG of someone in the horrifying place. later June realized they weren't were they were before. Where am I!!!! June said to Erika Do remember the old tale? Erika asked to June The one about the forest and then they get taken away or something? June replied Yeah excattly, but don’t you remember that our great grandma and our great aunt are twins? And they we're the ones taken away, maybe that has something to do with us! Erika said excitingly Whatever your idea is I want to get out June replied.

Wait a minute! Erika said we can pick the lock with our pins in our hair! Genius! June said and she pulled her hair pin out I’ll try! It took a couple tries but she was able to open it. “YES!” June shouted throwing her arms in the air. “Shhh not so loud June, they might hear us” Erika said her finger to her lips. They got each other out and tiptoed around the pathways, but whenever they though they came to a entrance it was a dead end. “How are we supposed to get out?” June asked, “ I dunno” Erika shrugged “Ok, I thought you were the genius, looks like your not right now” June said.

They kept walking and walking until they came to a big room. There was an ancient painting and writing on the front. “To escape the tunnel, two must be one, and one must be two” Erika said thinking “well how’s that going to help!” June said. “Well we are twins and maybe we are meant to be one person?” Erika said, “Like, that's going to happen” June siad. “We could try?” Erika said, they thought for a moment then held hands and said “two must be one, two must be one, two must be one!” they both said. Suddenly a glow came from their necklaces and some of the rocks we're glowing. Follow the glow Erika said to June kay June replied.

They followed the glow and magically they we're at the end. The rain had stopped and there was clear pathway back home. “YAY!” June said running around “Don’t fa “Ouch” june said as she stood back up “I told you!” Erika said, and they both laughed, they had made it out smoothly. But all Erika could think about is her book she left at the Cave opening, she knew it was ancient and old. Probably special as well but the main thing was is it gone or is it safe? But Erika just shook her head and kept moving forward.

Wednesday, September 12, 2018

The Ki-O-Rahi Tournament

The Ki-O-Rahi Tournament

Hello bloggers!
Today I have a post about the Kio-O-Rahi tournament.

Some of us went to the Ki-O-Rahi tournament at Gilberthorpe school a couple days ago.
There were four other schools that had come, there were four fields that we played in.
One round we had to ref a game and we would all spread out among the four feilds with pairs or groups of three with a whistle.
Overall I think that the Ki-O-rahi game was really fun, I think it was a great way to get running around for a change.
I think what challenged me most was trying to run away with the ball. Sometimes I would get the ball but I wouldn't run away fast enough because I would get tagged.

Here are some photos








Friday, September 7, 2018

If shoes could talk they would have Diaries...

Hello Bloggers!
Welcome to my blog, today I am posting a blog about out ten minute writing session!
We had ten minutes to write about if shoes could talk, or at least do things that humans can do.
I think that I have done good on having a sense of humor in my story.
To improve my writing I think that I should put more similes, descriptive phrases, metaphors, and interesting words.

I would love you to give me some feedback one my story to see what kind of similes, or descriptive phrases I could add and keep for another time!
This is my story about If your shoes could talk
Enjoy!

If your shoes could talk

Dear Diary,

It was my nightmare… You’d never guess, it was cross country day, AND they had to
run for like 3 km! Gosh by the end of the first kilometer sweat was pouring down his/her (I don’t know genders! Shoes don’t have them I think) legs, and I was as wet as ever, stinky as ever. It was like elephant dung mixed with old socks from the garbage and oh, much more other disgusting things!

The second kilometer they came to some hay bales and other obstacles. You’ll never guess… my human tripped over a hay bale and me and my partner went tumbling down the gigantic hay HILL! Plus when my human put them on again our backs we're full hay and whenever the humans feet moved inside our backs, the hay would tickle so much! So me and my partner thought up a really clever plan, we started to toss our humans feet about and we made him trip, and we shouted at him and he got such a fright that our human nearly had a heart attack. Oh what FUN!

I would say it was pretty fun for us, although now I’ve got soap in my eyes from washing, and my eyes are all red. But besides that we had a great time fooling around with our human.

Wednesday, September 5, 2018

My Concept map on Air pollution!

Hello bloggers!
I am back with a new blog post this time it's about what we are doing for our Inquiry learning!
Today we started our Mini Inquiry learning slides for a practice for our actual slides.
Firstly we started to brainstorm about out topic, my topic was Air pollution. We used some different ways to do this brainstorm, some people used Concept maps, and some people did Mind maps. I chose to do a Concept map.

I would love you bloggers to give me some feedback on my Concept map because I need to know what it's like from an audience's perspective. Please tell me if you understand it or not because that way I know how to make a better one when I do my actual one. What do you know about Air pollution? Are you affected by it?
Enjoy!


Friday, August 31, 2018

The Scarlet ibis

Hello Bloggers!
It's Mia here and today I have posted yet another amazing post.
It's about the Scarlet Ibis, I made poem for one of the activities on our slide.
Please give me some feedback on the poem, and how you think I could improve on my poem.
Enjoy!



Thursday, August 30, 2018

The Ice Palace...


This is a brief slideshow of what we are doing so far in our work for the Ice Palace.
Please give me some feedback on my writing on the last slide.
Enjoy!