The turtle swan in the deep blue sea,
Peacefully happily counting one, two, three,
Making a track of bubbles and that,
That’s when the spears attacked.
They makes a thump as it hits the floor.
The turtle swam to the head of the sun,
And met a bunch of whirlpools,
The whirlpools gulped the spears around,
Making sure the spears were never found.
That’s when the turtle thought that the
Whirlpools are the best hideouts of all.
Hey Mia! It's me Parwin and even though that I have already read your poem, I still want to keep on reading it over and over again cause it is such an amazing poem! In fact, your poem is probably the best one out of the whole class! While I was reading your poem, it reminded me of a story that was similar to yours but instead, it didn't have whirl pools and the turtle was a whale. There isn't anything you can do next time because yo added your story and you also added a photo to make people want to read it!
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Kind Regards,
Parwin
Thanks for the comment Parwin, I'm not quiet sure what you mean by the story?
DeleteHello Mia, I really like the way you made the story it's really interesting and when I was reading I understand that you ryhemed in it haswell also when you made this how was your experience and did you get any help along the way oh finishing this awesome artwork or this outstanding story share any kind of Idea's you had when you were planning maybe
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I just seem to like to rhyme things, it sort of automatically comes out. I did get some help from Mrs Stratten, but I mostly made it up. well I didn't really plan so much since the picture should tell the story. Thanks for the comment Nikita , plus what do you want to use my planning ideas for?
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