Hello Bloggers!
Welcome back to my blog!
Wondering why stores are scary? Well because it's based on my story :).
Today we had to improve a paragraph that the teachers wrote, using the tools that we learnt like similes, personification, metaphors and set of three.
Here is my story!
Please give feedback on how I used my tools, I would love to know how it feels like from your perspective.
Please note that there will be animations that pop up even without pressing anything.
Please note that there will be animations that pop up even without pressing anything.
Enjoy!
Kia ora Mia, this is Siale from St. Bernadette's School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your animation on how you think stores are scary and I think after watching this even I have worries about going to the store now.
I really liked the similes you put in the story like how you said " A cold spider clambered up his spine like fingers tapping against his back." This story was also great because you had a lot of descriptive words in it that made me more hooked into the story! I think your animations are awesome and I think it's cool how they can move as well.
What actually happened to the Harry?
Keep up the good work!
Siale
Hi Siale! Sorry for the late reply. Hmm, I will think of what happened to Harry, I'll make another post about what happened.
DeleteThank you so much for the comment!
Mia
Hey Mia, Its me Parwin!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, everything was amazing and I really liked how the writing kind of disappeared in some of the slides, it looked really cool! While I was reading your story, I had a very clear picture in my head. I like how you said WHY you did it and don't worry, the title is perfectly fine! I wrote something for that too but I think that your one was better than mine! Really like your story! I don't even think that there is anything to be improved on, your blog post AND story! I like how you wrote Night engulfed the tow like a cracking celestial cape (You used Alliteration!), A cold spider clambered up his fine like fingers tapping his back and... I could go on but I would have too much!
I really (Infinity times) like your story!
How long did it take you to make that animation?
Great job!
Looking forward to your next posts,
Parwin
Hi Parwin! It's me Mia,
DeleteThank you so much! You're already one of those people who are just making me enthusiastic about writing more about Harry and his encounter.
How long did it take? Well actually, I finished this in the time given so not very long at all. It's really easy.
Thank you!
Mia :)
Kia Ora Mia,
ReplyDeleteI like your post about scary noises. when I was reading one the third slide I didn't really get it but I like the rest of it great job