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Tuesday, April 24, 2018

The Enchanted Staff #4

Hello there bloggers and viewers, if you have been reading my story over the holidays here's the next part of it! If you haven't please read the others too.


Chapter 4
Who are you! (Mia and Mika)

Ahhh! Who are you! Screamed Mia and Mika, “mhh hmm” Said… whatever that thing was. Mika and Mia we're tied up to the wall, it was a small room made out of stone, there we're tiny holes in the roof and it had one lit torch. whatever the thing had revealed it’s true self, witch was only Parwin. “Whew” Mia said clutching her heart. “Hard landing on my but!” Said Parwin “You whatever you are, you better not drop me again!” Said Parwin pointing through the gap. “So I thought you guys were, waiting at the entrance, ha!” said Parwin sounding mad. “P, Please don’t get mad” Said Mia in a quiet voice. “For a start, why are we here!” Parwin hitting the floor hard, “Ahh! Don’t try that” Mika and Mia Chuckled.

They heard a voice up above their heads. “I wonder what happens if I pulled this thing” said the voice, “ I don’t trust it” Said another voice “ What are you doing!” said the voices “Shh!” said Parwin. Suddenly they heard a grunt, then a scream “Ahhh!” And what came from a hole was two creatures. “Ahh!” said Parwin, Mika, and Mia, “Ahhh!” said the two creatures. “Who are you!” screamed Mia, “I think you should stop doing that, who are you! Thing, Mia!” screamed Mika. Mia Stared into the darkened place. “Hehe!” and Mia did a little victory dance. “What are you doing Mia!” Said Mika. “Look it’s Jedi and Nikita” said Parwin. “Arhh!” Said Nikita, “they took the staff!” said Jedi “plus we know who it belonged to, we just need to get out of here! You thing! Give us back the staff! We all screamed.

“Well you two are tied up to the wall, but we are not, we are just tied up with our hands and feet” Jedi pointed out, “so if we untied just us three, we should be able to get you guys out” said Parwin. “Oh” said Nikita, “if only there was something to cut the ropes with” Said Mika looking around for something, “ah ha!” said Mia, “look it’s a sharp rock, this should work” and so the three of them came closer and Mika jabbed the ropes with the sharp rock and soon the three of them were free. First Mia got free from the ropes, and then Mika was unleashed. Mia said “Now we just need a plan to get outta here!”

1 comment:

  1. Hi Mia,
    I discovered your blog via the Uru Manuka twitter page and I definitely didn't regret visiting it.

    First of all I thoroughly enjoy how you have been blogging throughout the holidays, I've been working on doing it myself!

    I love your use of speech marks throughout your story series and the words you used - notably 'unleashed' and 'grunted' which allowed me to imagine the scene much better. An idea for next time is including more commas in your writing, which is something even I have a difficult time working on as a Year Nine student just so you know :)

    You seem like you enjoy blogging which is a really good trait to have. I hope you have a great next term at school, fantastic blogging!

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